Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 13 The funniest mistakes
I know that the story is about very serious issue, rather emotional etc., and I treat it also seriously. But I can’t resist sharing with you some of my mistakes which I made during the writing and my wonderful beta readers caught. I admit rather funny errors.
So if it could destroy your mood or break the decorum, just don’t read it.
Diego stayed in lemonade
instead of
he stayed for lemonade
The vision of Diego who soaks his feet in a bowl full of lemonade.
Diego was boiled with anger
instead of
he boiled with anger
As KariTBB notices, Diego could be cooked but this fits better into the Halloween challenge. (Her words, not mine 😀 )
He set Victoria on a bench and he started cutting.
instead of
Diego set her on the bench. He began to resume cutting vegetables.
Sliced Victoria, Halloween part two.
Felipe at the memory of his favourite girl, he rubbed his stomach and licked his lips.
instead of
Felipe at the memory of the cooking skills of his favourite girl, he rubbed his stomach and licked his lips.
Little and cute Felipe as a cannibal (Victoria is already sliced, remember?), Halloween part three.
You remember how hard I was going through my mother’s death
instead of
You remember how hard it was for me going through my mother’s death.
No comments here.
Victoria tried to prepare breakfast, but everything was coming out of her hands
instead of
but she kept dropping things
Spiderman’s nets come out of his hands, if Victoria has similar abilities with food, she would definitely make a fortune in the tavern.
He was afraid that the beautiful young women in his arms
instead of
He was afraid that the beautiful young woman in his arms
Handsome, rich, young Casanova 😀 I wonder how many women he could keep on his lap/ in his arms at once?
Picture of Victoria comes from www.newworldzorro.com
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- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 1 Echos of revolution
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 2 Wounded man and compassion
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 3 Death of Isabella Escalante
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 4 Return of the male Escalantes
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 5 The funeral
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 6 Absence and the first promise
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 7 Escape is discovered & the second promise
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 8 Hard beginnings
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 9 News about the family
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 10 Birthday’s present & goodbye to a friend
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 11 Return and Zorro
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 12 The Devil’s Fortress
- Diego’s promise to Alfonso Escalante – chapter 13 The funniest mistakes
